Sunday, August 8, 2010

Mirrors


Jenny Matlock gives a prompt that must be kept intact and used somewhere in the writing (it's in bold).

           Young Henry was exhilarated beyond belief when the Traveling Circus came to town. He had waited all day in line to see Fredrico the Fantastic Fortune Teller! He would finally get an answer to the most pressing question on his heart: did his beautiful classmate Mabel like him?
             Stepping in the tent, Henry posed this question to the marvelous Fredrico, who stared fixedly into a giant crystal ball. Fredrico narrowed his eyes stated mysteriously, “Objects in mirror are closer than they appear.”

            “Huh?” Henry replied, getting angry that Fredrico had taken his nickel and given him nonsense in return. He had been duped!  At that moment that his overbearing mother popped her head inside the tent, “Mr. Ford, get your little butt out here this instant!”

            Henry scurried outside muttering, “What a sham!”

13 comments:

~Lissa said...

Hahaha that's hilarious! I often feel my fortune cookies are vague and impersonal but this! Poor Henry! Great job!

Kat said...

Oh, how clever you are. Guess old Fredrico was more prescient then probably he even knew! Bet he had a heck of a time trying to figure out exactly what it was he was seeing :) Kat

Viki said...

LOL, this was really a fun one. I love that the kid went to a fortune teller with his pressing question. Then his mother coming in calling him "Mr. Ford", ha, ha. Good Centus.

cj Schlottman said...

Now here's a great take on this week's prompt. Poor kid - a crooked fortune teller and an overbearing mom!

Thanks..........cj

Jenners said...

You're making me wish I knew more about the life of Henry Ford right about now.

RockiBottom said...

Love the ending! What an amazing fortune teller Fredrico turned out to be.

linda said...

Hahaha!
I love this!
Poor Henry, he should have listened to Fredrico as soon as the words "closer than they appear" came out of his mouth.
Great story.

jeff campbell said...

Well done...time will tell the otutcome of his story and his yearnings...Peace

Tgoette said...

Great Centus this week! A wild and imaginative take on the prompt! So many writers this week are obviously hearing their muse because, even with only 100 words, the story ideas are so clever and well-written!

Cheryl said...

Got a snort out of me! Loved what you did here.

June Freaking Cleaver said...

I checked, even though the mirror may have been foretold, young Henry ended up marrying Clara - darn that Fredrico!

Sue said...

The prompt does sort of sound like something a fortune teller would say, doesn't it?

Nice take on this.

=)

Jenny said...

Wow. I love the fore-shadowing in this use of the prompt. Incredibly thought provoking. It feels like it might have happened. Really well written.

Thank you for linking to SC.

If you link the URL to your post...in this case:

http://circlingthecuckoosnest.blogspot.com/2010/08/mirrors.html

...it will be easier for readers to find you on this meme.

And your writing is something that should not be missed.

Love your take on this.

Thank you.