Saturday, July 2, 2011

imperfections

Freedom is to know what is good for my soul
             and be able to take it
Freedom is to know what is not good for my soul
             and be able to take it, too
Freedom is to having to tell you everything
              Freedom is not having to explain myself, too
Freedom means being allowed to argue my point of view
              Freedom means i can argue yours, too
Freedom says i can walk away whenever i want
               Freedom says i can stay indefinitely, too
Freedom is turning around midstream
               Freedom is staying the course, too
Freedom is not liking the flow and sound of this poem
              and putting it out there, too


okay this is for Poets United ("freedom" was this week's topic) and im not proud of this one because i want to sit a while longer and tweek it.  i am forcing myself to let it be imperfect--however much it sounds like nails on a chalkboard.  i am running late.  rather than coming back to finish it, i will let it be what it is.  ah, freedom!

12 comments:

Ella said...

I like these lines,
"Freedom is turning around midstream
Freedom is staying the course, too"
so true n' powerful~

Promising Poets Parking Lot said...

cool thoughts on freedom.

Geoff Maritz said...

And God says,"You are free."

Christine said...

The last line made me smile. So true about posting isn't it? Freedom to regret, and freedom to forget I always say.

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Pat Hatt said...

True we all have the freedom to like and not like, this one I like.

emmettwheatfall.com said...

Freedom is precious. I love the form, it gives the content such strenght.

Brian Miller said...

nice...i like the apparent contradictions in this...and in that there is freedom....smiles.

Friko said...

I'd leave the 'too' out and simply pair the opposing lines.

Otherwise, why are you unhappy about it? I like it.

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booguloo said...

I wonder aloud how many people don't realize they have these freedoms to choose from? It's a nice write, "too".